Right you all know the positives so I'll skip those and go for targets.
1. Lip syncing. The ECU of your singers lips need re-shooting as they dont quite match. You wont need to go outside for this. Try and get him to actually sing, it makes syncing seem more believable.
2. Narrative for playmobil. At 57sec needs to be clearer that they are being seperated (more reaction shots from male and female, long shots etc to establish this) Similarly 1:05-12 needs to be clearer in terms of the characters being seperated. The first split screen flip one of the screens so the characters walk towards each other rather than chasing each other. You'll need to establish who has put the arrows up to direct the characters back together. Generally there needs to be more of a 'will they wont they?' in terms of finding each other.
3. cut some of your tree avenue shots which seem to serve no purpose. 4. Presently a little 'uneven' - the first half needs a point of interest i.e. establish playmobil characters more (see point 2) 5. Girl in the band needs to either be cut or refilmed as lacking in enthusiasm.
Right you all know the positives so I'll skip those and go for targets.
ReplyDelete1. Lip syncing. The ECU of your singers lips need re-shooting as they dont quite match. You wont need to go outside for this. Try and get him to actually sing, it makes syncing seem more believable.
2. Narrative for playmobil. At 57sec needs to be clearer that they are being seperated (more reaction shots from male and female, long shots etc to establish this) Similarly 1:05-12 needs to be clearer in terms of the characters being seperated. The first split screen flip one of the screens so the characters walk towards each other rather than chasing each other. You'll need to establish who has put the arrows up to direct the characters back together. Generally there needs to be more of a 'will they wont they?' in terms of finding each other.
3. cut some of your tree avenue shots which seem to serve no purpose.
ReplyDelete4. Presently a little 'uneven' - the first half needs a point of interest i.e. establish playmobil characters more (see point 2)
5. Girl in the band needs to either be cut or refilmed as lacking in enthusiasm.
MPS/KKS